Writers’ Mill minutes July 19th 2020

25 people attended the Writers’ Mill Zoom meeting this month, and enjoyed a very informative, inspirational and encouraging talk from Cindy Brown, author of the Ivy Meadows mysteries. Cindy’s handout can be downloaded from https://www.portlandwritersmill.org/wp-content/uploads/2020/07/Mysteries-handout-from-Cindy-Brown.docx and I’ll include the edited version with notes from our session at the end of this email.

Don’t forget to write your MOUNTAINS AND VALLEYS stories, poems and essays for our August contest, deadline the end of the August 2nd.

Consider:

  • Geographic and geologic descriptions of
    • places you have been
    • places you would like to visit
    • places you would like to admire from a distance (i.e. Everest, Kilimanjaro)
  • Highlights and/or that low point of life and career
  • Molehills and/or whatever term you might give to those small valleys of life’s adventures/journeys

And remember, as always, we accept poetry, fiction, non-fiction that is 1200 words or less: entries to contest at portlandwritersmill.org

Also don’t forget you can still read and comment on all the contest entries from this month’s COMING TOGETHER contest. Artwork from David’s daughter Julia assisted in the awards presentation, with:

  1. First place: Karin Krafft’s Foreign Legion story
  2. Second place: Jean Harkin’s the Girl I didn’t Know, and
  3. Third place: Jessie Collins’s Special Occasions

Voting left some close finishes but no tied entries…. Other entrants were:

  • Judy Beaston wrote the poem–A Quiet Family Day
  • Joe Holloway wrote the essay — Can We Come Together
  • Zita Podany wrote the poem — Coming Together on ZOOM
  • Sheila Deeth wrote the prose poem (?) It’s All Coming Together
  • Sheila Deeth also wrote the story — Kitkit and the Fireworks
  • Peter Letts wrote the fascinating tale — The New Moon Ritual
  • Robin Layne wrote the story — Welcoming Lilly 

Contest deadlines are always the end of the first Sunday of the month, and wordcounts are 1200 words. Entries go to contest@potlandwritersmill.org. Upcoming themes (details at https://www.portlandwritersmill.org/contests/upcoming-2020-contests/) are:

  • August – Mountains and Valleys (from Peter)
  • September – Strange Times (from Jessie)
  • October – Beyond the headlines (from Joanne)
  • November – as a reward for winning this month’s contest, Karin gets the privilege of choosing November’s theme. (I usually call it a victor’s penalty, but Judy says it’s a reward.)

Also, don’t forget to submit your entries for this year’s anthology: the theme is CHALLENGES, and the deadline for that is the first Sunday in September—just when you’re sending in those “strange times” entries. If you’ve been entering our contests, you should already have lots of potential submissions stored on your computer, but all our members (plus occasional sons and daughters) are free to submit something. You can find more details at https://www.portlandwritersmill.org/19/challenges-2020-anthology/ Entries go to anthology at portlandwritersmill.org and the submission requirements are as follows:

  • No more than 5 separate entries per member (not counting pictures)
  • No more than 5,000 words in total – for example, you might send one 5,000 word novella, or five 1,000 word essays, or four 999 word stories plus one 4-word cartoon…
  • Pictures will be included as appropriate. Feel free to send pictures with your entries, or separately from your entries, but remember all images must be royalty-free for us to use them in a published work.

Matthew led a critique of Ginny’s  children’s book, in which we discussed:

  1. How long is middle grade, chapbook, picture book and what gets included in word-count? Don’t count words – just write. If it’s the right length, then that’s the length it should be. If it’s not, your beta-readers or editors will help you think where to lengthen or shorten it.
  2. Should a child reader always be 2 years younger than the child protagonist? When the theme is so universally appealing, the book may appeal to younger or older ages. The voice of the protagonist is what sells it – is this someone a child would listen to? And the important thing is to maintain a consistent child’s voice.
  3. How do after-stories fit in when you’re telling a true story, and can a mostly true story be sold as fiction? Fiction is easier to sell, avoids the need to be boringly true-to-life, means you can create more conflict (and therefore more interest) and allows the writer and reader to have more fun (by juxtaposing events into favorite scenes that didn’t really happen). After-stories give the author a chance to confess what’s true and what’s not. But including real people leaves you open to their complaining that “That’s not how it happened.”
  4. How do you find illustrators? A publisher will probably have their own illustrators for your book. If self-publishing, you can probably find students who illustrate. Or look on Fiverr. Or a Writers’ Mill friend might know someone.
  5. How can you tell if your writing is interesting enough? Asking family might not help, especially not if they’re in the story. Asking age-appropriate beta-readers, or parents or grandparents of children the right age might be more useful. It seems like Ginny’s on the right track with her story.
  6. What do kids like, read, think…? They might blow up the trivial and miss the important; they prioritize differently; they get discouraged but often won’t say so.
  7. How can we add conflict in a chidren’s story? Maybe make the brothers into opponents, or reluctant allies, or unknowns who eventually champion the cause at the end.
  8. What kind of secrets might add depth? Maybe a child wonders why her parents can’t afford a dog.
  9. What makes a story unique? Not just the fact that it’s mostly true. There’s also the unique voice of the protagonist. The unique imagination of the author. The unique insights that go beyond what happened…

Our next meeting will be August 16th, 1-3 on Zoom. Carolyn Martin will return with another much-anticipated poetry/inspiration workshop. Put it on your calendars and we’ll see you there.

And now for the notes from Cindy’s talk.

Mystery Workshop with Cindy Brown

Writing Character-Based Mysteries
Cindy Brown
cindybrownwriter.com
info@cindybrownwriter.com

Books: Macdeath, The Sound of Murder, Oliver Twisted, Ivy Get Your Gun, The Phantom of Oz, Killalot, Murder Most Theatrical (Anthology – August 2020)

Cindy has been writing for 30 years, writing plays, screenplays, novels, 6 mysteries, 2 nonfiction books… winning awards…

Her talk began with the question of whether she’s a plotter or a pantser. Pantsers just sit down and write, while plotters set up a dramatic structure (like story-line sign-posts) first. So she plots, then her characters make their demands and she pantses.

Cindy’s first book took 5-7 years to write. Among her various rewrites was a need to make it first person, since agents said that works best for light (cozy) mysteries (not all her books are cozies!) Then came the next book, with only 9 months allowed according to contract because people read cozies quickly and want more. She says we should never agree to less than 1 year for the next book!

In answer to questions from the group, Cindy added:

  • Traditional publishers will often assign you a developmental editor, but
  • you probably need around 5 drafts before you go near a publisher, then expect several more revisions.
  • A developmental editor will look at
    • length
    • organization
    • whether a character can be cut
    • the big picture
  • Then you’ll want a red line editor who looks for unclear patches, weak motivation etc
  • and then a copyeditor who proofreads.
  • If self-publishing, best to use a developmental editor followed by a copyeditor.
  • Reading groups and beta readers help – maybe six people, not necessarily all at once.
  • One beta-reader should be familiar with the subject matter.
  • It’s hard to share a book chapter by chapter with beta-readers as they’ll forget things. Better to share the problem areas, then the whole book when it’s finished.

You might want to sign up for Cindy’s “slightly silly newsletter” https://www.cindybrownwriter.com/the-slightly-silly-newsletter

And now, here are the notes from Cindy’s talk.

Premise

Where to get ideas? Cindy shared where her recent ideas have come from:

  • Just a vague idea (MacDeath: Macbeth is a cursed play; what if someone dies?)
  • News media (Ivy Get your Gun: A report of an accidental shooting in a re-enactment of the OK Corral)
  • A scene (Killalot: passing an AZ renaissance fair, imagine a jouster riding off)
  • What really annoys you (Phantom of Oz: how the acting industry focusses on body image)

She asked us for some ideas, using these suggestions, and we picked the last one:

  • Zoom meeting, someone keels over
  • Abusive parent
  • Portland under siege (people taken away in unmarked cars)

Protagonist

The protagonist might be:

  • Professional – What type (e.g. police detective, private investigator, etc.)?
  • Or Amateur – What makes them interesting? Why do they get drawn into the investigation? They usually provide a lighter novel, and they need to have a special quirk or hobby to draw readers in, plus a reason why they might know at least some of what they’re doing.

Cindy asked for a suggestion and we chose:

  • An MI6 agent brought in as an impartial investigator

We need to think about why he’s been brought in – was one of the victims British?

Victim

Is the victim innocent or guilty? Do they know the killer?

We came up with a few victim suggestions, and Cindy pointed out we can have always more than one victim:

  • A protestor who was actually involved in something else
  • A British tourist was abducted, accidentally caught up in it…
  • Abduct the mayor of Portland
  • And of a British town…

If we have more than one victim, we might need to decide which one is the innocent bystander.

Five suspects (including killer/villain)

Cindy recommends five suspects. She asks us to consider:

  • How are they connected to the crime?
  • Why are they here?
  • Why are they suspicious?

Then

For all characters

At this point, Cindy suggests you complete a character analysis for each character that includes (at least):

  • Motivation (could be something political, a desire to change the world, or best friends with the victim)
  • Goal (be specific: get someone elected, get revenge, personal gain)
  • Conflict (could be external or internal:
    • entrenched,
    • someone you love opposes what you’re doing,
    • you need to drive and don’t have a car
  • Secret (what makes this person suspicious; what makes them lie: in love with someone, criminal past)
  • Epiphany (the point where they move beyond their history, move forward)

Working through the character’s motivation helps us work out where they fit into the story, and even what story it is that they’re fitting in to.

We did this for:

Protagonist

  • Secret: they’re a retired terrorist/kidnapper, working under an assumed name, would be extradited if identity discovered
  • Motivation: they’ve seen the horrors, doesn’t want this to continue
  • Goal: use expertise to stop this happening to others
  • Conflict:
    • family members are in organization that kidnapped demonstrators.
    • One of those kidnapped “deserves” to be removed.
    • The investigator was here for another reason, wasn’t there to witness the kidnapping, has to piece information together from witnesses and media
  • Epiphany: can tell someone who they really are and become part of human world.

Or

  • Motivation: improving others’ lives
  • Goal: get a protesting friend out of danger
  • Conflict: has a really bad temper
  • Secret: insecure needs others’ approval
  • Epiphany: might lose friend if can’t control temper

Victim

Suspects

They’re an exercise for us to do at home (though we’re delighted that Cindy said she’d be willing to come back for a longer session another time).

Then:

Write a page in each character’s voice. This could be:

  • Describing an event in the story,
  • Describing how they feel about their conflict,
  • Showing how they hide their secret…

and then maybe:

Plot

Save the cat! writes a novel (https://www.jessicabrody.com/books/non-fiction/save-cat-writes-novel/about/) is a really good resource.

There are different ways to plot your novel. The following are just three, suggested by Cindy, with notes from our discussion:

Dramatic Structure Method

Act I:

  • Define the World of the story
    • Portland, 2020, protests and Fed snatches
  • Inciting incident
    • kidnap of someone British
  • Turning point (leads to Act II) which changes everything
    • MI6 is hunting for a Russian,
    • and another kidnapping victim is FBI

Act II:   (Act II all too easily becomes a saggy middle, so avoid being episodic.)

  • Obstacles and reversals
    • No license plate on car
    • Protagonist gets arrested
  • Midpoint
    • another dead body or another crime
  • More obstacles and reversals

Act III:

  • Crisis/All is lost
    • civic militia gets involved,
    • anarchy,
    • family member is heavily involved
  • Climax – how protagonist solves it. (Might not know this till you get there. Cindy says she’s a plotter, in that she starts with a plot, and a pantser in that the characters might take the story in their own direction.)
  • Denouement – wrap-up, should be short (1 to 2 chapters), and should tie off all red herrings.
    • This is where the ex-terrorist (in one of our scenarios) tells people who he is and leaves the organization.

Mini-Movie Method (Chris Soth) offers more signposts in creating the plot

  1. Ordinary world. Ends with the inciting incident.
  2. Reluctant hero. Wants to make the problem go away.
  3. Hero tries to solve the problem using typical methods. Fails.
  4. Hero makes a new plan and puts it into action, but uses old ways. Fails again.
  5. The errors of the hero’s old ways are revealed. Recognizes the need for change.
  6. Hero takes action, committing to change once and for all. But, alas, that backfires.
  7. A revelation allows him to see victory, but it is snatched away in yet another reversal. It ain’t over yet!
  8. The hero puts down the last attempt and triumphs. Then perhaps an epilogue.

Snowflake Method – Randy Ingermanson  more narrative…

Think of this as a One sentence summary expanded, and expanded, and expanded… So here’s our one-sentence summary:

An MI6 operative, secretly a retired terrorist, tries to find a kidnapped protestor in Portland.

Then, in the words of Anne Lamott, write a shitty first draft.

And lastly: Revise, revise, revise!

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